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Five Sentence Fiction – Delicate

Delicate

She was all piss and vinegar, the runt. Like a Chihuahua facing down a Great Dane, Maggie found the fights. She laughed, later, at how the big guys always backed down. Cowards.

She couldn’t have been more than 90 pounds when I carried her body off the field that day.

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Author’s Notes

This week’s Five Sentence Fiction entry – I think it works. It sets up something, doesn’t linger on it, and really takes a chance with that one word sentence, which is pretty damned bold in a five sentence fiction story. I really wanted to stick with the easy stuff – flowers, femininity, delicate things like spider webs or emotions.

Then I kicked myself in the ass and said, “That just won’t do, now will it? NO.” And then I had an idea that the girl is a firecracker that ends up believing in her own mystique, and succumbs to it. But I wanted to express that in the five sentences. Along with the one-word sentence extra challenge I gave myself.

Another challenge I give myself every time is to avoid the trap of run-on sentences. Yes, five sentences to convey a coherent thought is tough. Have you seen Five Second Films? That’s even tougher. But don’t fall prey to run-on sentences in your five sentence fiction. Instead, delete half your words. Then delete half again. Then get out the scalpel and pare down the last few.

Endings: five sentence fiction

“I don’t like endings,” she said with a quivering smile.

“Then let’s not end it.”

“But you’re so wrong for me,” she turned to hide the tears in her eyes.

She pulled back the hammer and paused, sighing.

The shot cracked, he fell back, the gun hit the floor, and she went white with regret.

 

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Author’s notes

I recently discovered a website called Five Sentence Fiction. It’s pretty much as-described – you write five sentences based on one word of inspiration. I decided to enter this week. It’s a stretch to get a full story conveyed in such a short format, but that’s the point.

I read some of the other entries and a lot of them used run-on sentences to meet the 5-sentence goal, which I think satisfies the letter of the law but not the intent.